I love rain (just thought I would toss that in).
I didn't follow the Read Write Poem prompt, but I did write a poem in response to one of Rumi's. The Rumi poem is listed first, courtesy of http://www.rumi.net/rumi_by_shiva.htm, followed by my poem.
Poem by Rumi
You think you are alive
because you breathe air?
Shame on you,
that you are alive in such a limited way.
Don't be without Love,
so you won't feel dead.
Die in Love
and stay alive forever.
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My Response, Untitled
I know I am alive
because I breathe air.
Shame on yourself,
never having learned the power of a deep breath.
I am not without love
and no one lives forever.
In fact, when I found life in love
part of me was already dead.
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Great, gutsy response and a turnaround with the power to shock. I liked it!
ReplyDeleteI looked at that one too....
ReplyDeleteThose last two lines really drive it home for me. Well done!
Wow, the first two lines were really powerful - as was the rest of the poem. Lovely poem. (:
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"I breath and love, therefore I am." Philosophical!
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