Two poems today. Conjuring up unflattering images of my exes was easy; taking responsibility for my own actions wasn't. If this poem seems a little one-sided, it's probably because it is. Completely unintentional, I swear.
Up In Flames
Maybe when I bent
It wasn’t back far enough
And you couldn’t tell
I was bending for you
Or maybe you thought
I took you for granted
A creature of habit
I let the spark fade
You’re the one that got away
Maybe I wasn’t enough
You always wanted
Bigger
And better things
Or maybe I was too good
You couldn’t bear
To hold me back
For one more second
I’m the one that got away
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This was written about one of my exes, but titled after a friend's ex.
Heather
I can still see
The look in your eyes
As my famous last words
Became suspended
Frozen in time
I tried to catch them
But they were cold
To the touch
I never meant to hurt you
Side Note: I'd like to take a moment to thank everyone who has come by to read my poems, commented on them, or emailed me. I really appreciate the support. And thanks to Read Write Poem for the daily prompts.
Up In Flames
Maybe when I bent
It wasn’t back far enough
And you couldn’t tell
I was bending for you
Or maybe you thought
I took you for granted
A creature of habit
I let the spark fade
You’re the one that got away
Maybe I wasn’t enough
You always wanted
Bigger
And better things
Or maybe I was too good
You couldn’t bear
To hold me back
For one more second
I’m the one that got away
******************************************************
This was written about one of my exes, but titled after a friend's ex.
Heather
I can still see
The look in your eyes
As my famous last words
Became suspended
Frozen in time
I tried to catch them
But they were cold
To the touch
I never meant to hurt you
Side Note: I'd like to take a moment to thank everyone who has come by to read my poems, commented on them, or emailed me. I really appreciate the support. And thanks to Read Write Poem for the daily prompts.
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Sweet poem, tragic indeed; the title is so strong when compared to the rest, I was surprised.
ReplyDeleteFirst stanza was excellent.
i like this...
ReplyDeletei like this a lot.
:O)
Well done! I enjoyed the kind of back and forth of the "You're/I'm the one that got away" lines.
ReplyDelete"Conjuring up unflattering images of my exes was easy; taking responsibility for my own actions wasn't."
ReplyDeleteLOL ~ I had the exact same problem myself, writing from this prompt . Nice ending!
Claire
Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteI like especially:
"Maybe when I bent
It wasn’t back far enough
And you couldn’t tell
I was bending for you"
Loved this part:
ReplyDeleteMaybe when I bent
It wasn’t back far enough
And you couldn’t tell
I was bending for you
VERY NICE JOB!
I also enjoyed the back and forth of you're the one/I'm the one who got away.
ReplyDeleteI love the first two lines, bending.
ReplyDeletethe second poem is simple in a direct sort of way, and my fav of the two. I immediately saw a physical image of words frozen in the air and plumes of vapor surrounding them. Awesome image..
ReplyDeleteI love how the first poem shifts from "you're the one that got away" to "I'm the one that got away." I also love, love, LOVE the first stanza especially.
ReplyDeleteSecond poem--nice visual image of words being suspended...
The image of bending is a wonderful thought about how we contort ourselves into love.
ReplyDeleteIn the first poem, I love the way you present different perspectives and then turn it round.
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